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You missed an international flight due to a problem at the airport. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter: Describe what happened that caused you to miss your flight Explain how missing your flight impacted you Clearly state what you would like the airline to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter regarding my dissatisfaction
to miss
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 my international
flight
due to
 technical faults in your
flight
. Let me elaborate on the problem in more detail. On
24th
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the 24th
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 of April, I had an international connecting
flight
 from Paris airport to Canada but I was unable to grab my plane because my India to Paris Air Canada
flight
 was delayed, resulting in missing my next
flight
.
Although
 your plane was on time, it arrived late
on
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an
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the
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 airport. I had to wait for two days in
Paris
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a Paris
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 hotel to take
new
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 emergency ticket to
Canadian
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a Canadian
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flight
 which was extremely expensive. I had an important meeting with my international clients but I had to postpone it, leading to
decrease
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our
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 company's reputation
due to
 my non-punctuality. I am going to request you to refund
my
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 money that
i
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 had to spend on my connecting
flight
 which
i
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 had to pay
two times
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.
Besides
, I would like to suggest you
to
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modify the
flight
 timings so that it could be suitable for people to take their flights on time. I look forward to hearing back from you. Yours sincerely, Pawan
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task achievement
Consider providing more detail and structure in the explanation of the impact the missed flight had on you. This will make your argument stronger and clearer.
coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, ensure that all details are presented in a clear and organized manner. Subdivide the paragraphs based on the specific points you are making.
greeting and closing
The introduction and closing statements are clear and polite, which creates a good tone for the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making your letter easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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