The movement of people from agricultural areas to big cities has caused many problems at both places. What are the reasons of this problem and how can it be solved?

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There is no denying the fact that moving to big modern cities is a crucial thing for a better life.

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, it causes many issues for both agricultural areas and modern places.

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essay will discuss

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problem and I will try to analyze the reasons and if there is any chance to solve it. On the one hand, there are several reasons why people left their villages and agricultural places. Maybe they don't have lots of opportunities there. Maybe they just want to quit

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way of life and experience the fast life in big towns, but it could be possible that living in far agricultural places like the countryside is a tough thing compared to living in a modern city and it is easy to get a proper education to your children or healthcare and a higher salary.

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, when it comes to what problems

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issue causes. It is clear to the naked eye that when the farmers leave the farmlands it will cause starvation in the country.

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, no one will be happy about

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, let us move to the solutions and what we can do to solve the problem. Actually, there are a lot of solutions and one of them is to develop the countryside and the agricultural areas so people will not have to abandon their lands and farms, which I believe is the main reason why they left in the first place. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to

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question. On balance,

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, I tend to believe that the government must take positive steps to improve the countryside and give the people the support they deserve, so they don't leave and create other problems.

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Provide specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention particular areas or industries affected by the migration.

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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in structuring your response.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

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The movement of people from agricultural areas to big cities has caused many problems at both places. What are the reasons of this problem and how can it be solved?

Fully explain your ideas

Most of the people in the society enjoy watching crime movies and criminal TV programs. Why do you think people have more interest to watch them? What is the impact to the society due to this?

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Surveillance cameras in banks, offices, shops and streets have been very successful in reducing crime in the workplace and public, but they are also took for their users to spy on people's private business. what problems do surveillance cameras create? what are the solutions?

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