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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011,and2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011,and2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of house
property
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properties
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 in the US across five
income
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 groups in 2007,2011 and 2015. In 2001,
number
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 of households was the highest in the
group
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 of $10000 or more annual
income
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, at around 29m.
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 figure declined to about 28m in 2011,
lagged
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 behind the groups of less than $25000 and between $50000 and $74999, before climbing to the highest again in 2015, at approximately 33m. In comparison, people who had
annual
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an annual
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income
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 of $75000-$99999
were owning
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owned
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 the least
number
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 of houses throughout the period, at nearly 14m in 2007,
then
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 fluctuated slightly over the eight years, reaching 15m in 2015. Meanwhile, the less than $25000
group
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 and $25000-$49999
group
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, started at 25m and 27m respectively in 2007, both saw a
shlightly
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slight
 rise in 2011
,
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 before
fell
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falling
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 steadily to around 27m and 28m respectively by 2015.
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, the
group
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of
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with
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 an
income
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 of $50000-$74999 remained constant throughout the years in terms of property
number
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, at around 21m.
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, for all
income
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 groups the
number
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 of households slightly
droped
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dropped
 by 2011, and rose again by 2015.
Howerver
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However
, for people with
annual
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an annual
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income
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 of $50000-$74999,
this
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 figure remained consistent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, income, group, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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