The graph below shows the average montly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average montly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph illustrates the monthly value trend of three metals, namely copper, nickel and zinc throughout 2014.
Overall
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while
all three
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metal categories faced a fluctuation, nickel was the one
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experienced the wildest fluctuation in the given period. Nickel started at 6% in January and plummeted to 1% in March.
Moreover
, it dropped again to -3% by June but slightly recovered to -1% from July to September, yet it dropped to -2 in October.
Nonetheless
, it skyrocketed to 1% in November. Increased to 3% in February, Zinc dipped to the lowest peak at -1% in June. After modest fluctuation between June and October at below 0%, the price increased to below 2% and 3% in November and December, respectively.
On the other hand
, Copper only fell from 2% to approximately 0,5% in March and dipped again to -0,5% in May.
Nevertheless
, the price increased to 1% in July and after a modest decrease in October, the number went up to just below 2% in December.
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  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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