The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The following bar chart illustrates the countries that consumed and produced the most amount of
electricity
in 2014. At first glance, it is evident that the first two countries, China and USA, used and generated
electricity
significantly, compared to the other eight remaining countries. Another interesting point is that Germany was the only country that produced power less than its annual usage. Looking at the details, China, which was pioneering in both
production
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and usage of
electricity
, produced 5,398
billion
kW and used 5,322
billion
kW per hour. The US stood in
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second place with 4,099
billion
kWh generation and 3,866 consumption of power. Russia, Japan and India generated and used
electricity
moderately, followed by Canada, France and Brazil, which had a
fewer
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production and usage.
Although
Germany used power not quite as much as India, it produced energy almost as much as Brazil, which means that Germans consumed more energy rather than producing it.
Lastly
, Korea was at the bottom of the list
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only generating 485,1
billion
kWh and using 449,5
billion
kWh.
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