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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The provided bar chart gives information about the number of items Scotland's
exports
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,
who
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 rests in the
UK
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 and the
world
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 for the year 2014. It is obviously seen that,
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 analyzed period the highest
indicator
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 of
exports
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 to the
world
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 was business services, finance and hotels,
restaurant
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 service,
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 fishing and mining
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 the lowest Scotland
exports
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 of the
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compared to
Scotland
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exports
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 to the rest of
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UK
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 and the
world
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 the highest
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 was business services, finance and hotels,
restaurant
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and restaurant
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 service observed in the
world
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 Chemicals and mineral products
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 in the
UK
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, that made up 13.8
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 and 5
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 respectively. fishing and mining
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 of the lowest
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indicator
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 among experts
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also
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 accounted
3
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billion
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 collectively. In the
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 other
manufactoriing
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manufacturing
 two times less exported, than the
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 accounted
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 1%,
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, the percentage of metals, mechanical and transport
euipment
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equipment
 was the same figures approximately 2.5
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world
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world
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 wholesale and retail
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indicator
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was
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 four
tims
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times
 more than
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UK
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exports
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 was 8.2
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, uk, world, indicator, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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