The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon
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The given diagram presents information about
population
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increase between 1940 and 2000 in 3 different countries in the U.S state of Oregon
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the graph below,
overall
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we can say that,in
Columbia
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and in Yamhill,the
population
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rise
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almost equally, with a difference of a maximum of 15 thousand
people
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. It could be
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noted
that in Washington from 1940 to 1970 the number of
people
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grew gradually from 75,000 to 125,000,but next 30 years,from 1970 to 2000,the
population
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rose sharply from 125,000 to 245,000,and it is the largest
population
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of all three countries.
Columbia
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has the smallest
population
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of all three of them,but despite
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this
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it
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also
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had an upward trend in the quantity of
people
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.From 1940 to 2000
population
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upsurge
for
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almost 55,000. Now turning to the details the
year
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1970 to 2000 saw the
population
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of
Columbia
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and Yamhill increase by approximately the same amount that they had
rise
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by the 30 years before,but it
still
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conspicuous that Yamhill has a larger
population
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than
Columbia
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.The biggest difference is almost 15 thousand
people
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, columbia, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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