Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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, many
people
think marrying for
money
is
best
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option. I
also
think that we should marry for
love
not for
money
because
love
more
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important than
money
. But
money
is
also
important but we should not marry for it. In
this
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essay
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i
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am going to share my opinion.
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other
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hand, is that many
people
tell marry for
love
i think
that is
good and a wise
choice
because if there is no
love
or
effection
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affection
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between each
partner
there will not be a proper family and bonding with each other.
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example
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if
your
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are sick your
partner
will be next to you
have
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a
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take
care
of you and help you in need. In your low
adn
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and
down
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there will be always your
partner
to support you and motivate you. She/he will
also
take
care
of
you
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family and your relative.
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other
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hands
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, many
people
this
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that
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marry
to
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wealth
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wealthy
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or rich
guy
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. In
this
generation
the
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people
think to marry with the rich or for
money
is
wise
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choice
then
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than
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marrying for
love
.
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example
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if your
partner
is sick
and
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there will not be your
partner
to comfort you and take
care
of you. I do not think that
marry
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the wiser
choice
to marry for
money
because you do not get the
love
,
care
,
honest
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and affection from him/her. So, at
last
that
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the
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marrying for
the
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money
is not
the
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a
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wise
choice
. In
this
essay
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i
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I
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have told the reason
that
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why
the
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marrying for
money
is
noy
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not
good
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a good
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choice
. I have
also
told
that
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them
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why
the
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marrying for
love
is
good
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a good
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choice
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task achievement
Work on providing a clearer, more detailed argument for each side of the debate, ensuring that your own opinion is well integrated.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a logical progression and clear connections between ideas. Paragraphs should be well organized and linked logically.
coherence cohesion
Use more specific and relevant examples to support your points. This strengthens your argument and makes it more convincing.
task achievement
You clearly addressed both points of view, which is a critical part of discussing the issue.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, ensuring a structured format.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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