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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table shows the comparison of aspects of
service
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 among three different health centres.
Overall
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, based on five aspects marked, Peveril
Centre
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 has
the
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apply
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excellent
service
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, followed by Marchbank
Centre
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 and Longston
Centre
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. Looking at the table, the Peveril
Centre
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 has an average
score
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8.3
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of 8.3
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 out of 10 based on five
service
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criterias
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criteria
.
Moreover
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, they obtain the highest
score
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 for every aspect compared to other health centres. Patients give them the highest
score
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 on the aspect of their response to concerns with 9.6, followed by booking appointments and doctor's
service
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 aspects with 9.1 and 8.7, respectively.
Furthermore
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, the Marchbank
Centre
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 gets 7.2 of
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overall
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the overall
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score
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, where they get the highest
score
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 on doctor's
service
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 criteria with 8.4
while
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 the smallest
score
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 on pharmacy criteria with only 5.8. Meanwhile, the
Longston
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Langston
Centre
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 has the worst
service
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 because the patients only give them an average
score
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5.8
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of 5.8
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, the smallest among them all. The lowest
score
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 comes from
response
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a response
the response
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 to concerns aspect where they are marked only 4.3 out of 10.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, centre, score with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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