The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the comparison of aspects of
service
among three different health centres.
Overall
, based on five aspects marked, Peveril
Centre
has
the
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excellent
service
, followed by Marchbank
Centre
and Longston
Centre
. Looking at the table, the Peveril
Centre
has an average
score
8.3
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out of 10 based on five
service
criterias
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criteria
.
Moreover
, they obtain the highest
score
for every aspect compared to other health centres. Patients give them the highest
score
on the aspect of their response to concerns with 9.6, followed by booking appointments and doctor's
service
aspects with 9.1 and 8.7, respectively.
Furthermore
, the Marchbank
Centre
gets 7.2 of
overall
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the overall
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score
, where they get the highest
score
on doctor's
service
criteria with 8.4
while
the smallest
score
on pharmacy criteria with only 5.8. Meanwhile, the
Longston
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Langston
Centre
has the worst
service
because the patients only give them an average
score
5.8
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, the smallest among them all. The lowest
score
comes from
response
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a response
the response
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to concerns aspect where they are marked only 4.3 out of 10.
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