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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the whole
number
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 of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the United Kingdom , classified in three categories, between 1995 and 2002 .
Overall
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 , it is clearly seen that the usage of mobiles and fixed
lines
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 for national and international calls increased significantly over the period of time mentioned and reached a peak in the
last
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year
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 .
Although
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 the usage Local - fixed line had fluctuated throughout the years yet , it remained the most used type among all .
Firstly
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 , just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 were spent on local - fixed
lines
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. The
number
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 continued growing moderately to reach exactly 90
billion
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minutes
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 by the
year
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 1999 . Afterwards, the figure declined to around 74
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002 .
Secondly
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 , the National and International call-fixed
lines
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 scored a figure of just under 40
minutes
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 in the starting
year
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 .
Then
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 , the
number
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 showed a steady rise over the years by almost 3% annually.In the closing
year
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 , 60
billion
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minutes
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 of calls were recorded. people used mobiles fewer times and only around 6% of
minutes
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 were spent . The data grew massively , especially in the
last
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 three years but the total
number
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 was less by around 15% from fixed-line.
To conclude
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 , an obvious increase is seen in both mobiles and national and international fixed
lines
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 , but the local fixed line was the most used in the period of time given .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, lines, year, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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