The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The presented chart describes during every 30 days the quantity of percentage by
wich
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which
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the
prize
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price
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of three different types of metals, copper, nickel and zinc, changed compared with the previous months.
Overall
, all of the three lines, that represent the materials, have a fluctant variation,
although
all began and ended the year with a positive difference
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their values.
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, nickel and zinc have a similar trend, in
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they both present a thorough in June, of -3% and -1%
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and in October, of -2% and -1%, followed
then
by an increase. Despite that, nickel has experienced in the month of January a
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bigger
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of
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the prizes, by 6%, than zinc. Copper had a more steady
changing
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of its value on the market, despite a decrease
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-1% that lasted for 60 days starting from May. In conclusion, all of the prizes remained fully steady for 60 days until September, with a
slighlty
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slight
slightly
decrease afterwards.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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