The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The presented chart describes during every 30 days the quantity of percentage by
wich
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which
prize
of three different types of metals, copper, nickel and zinc, changed compared with the previous months.
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price
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, all of the three lines, that represent the materials, have a fluctant variation, Linking Words
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all began and ended the year with a positive difference Linking Words
of
their values.
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, nickel and zinc have a similar trend, in Correct your spelling
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fact
they both present a thorough in June, of -3% and -1%Add a comma
fact,
,
and in October, of -2% and -1%, followed Remove the comma
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then
by an increase. Despite that, nickel has experienced in the month of January a Linking Words
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the prizes, by 6%, than zinc. Copper had a more steady Change preposition
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of its value on the market, despite a decrease Replace the word
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-1% that lasted for 60 days starting from May. In conclusion, all of the prizes remained fully steady for 60 days until September, with a Change preposition
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slighlty
decrease afterwards.Correct your spelling
slight
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