The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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of
shop
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closures
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and
openings
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in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
shop
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openings
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fell significantly from around 8,500 to about 4,000 by 2015. Meanwhile, the
number
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of
shop
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closures
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remained stable until 2014, before sharply dropping to just over 500
closures
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in 2015. After the significant drop in
shop
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openings
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between 2011 and 2012, the
number
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began to rise, reaching just above 6,000 in 2014.
However
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, the
number
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of
openings
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dropped again to around 4,000 in 2015. From 2015 onward,
shop
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openings
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remained relatively stable, ending 2018 with approximately 5,100 shops.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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of
shop
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closures
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remained relatively stable between 2011 and 2014, reaching just above 6,000
closures
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in 2014.
However
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, the
number
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of
closures
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fell dramatically in 2015.
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the
number
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began to rise again in 2016, reaching just above 5,000, it remained relatively stable
thereafter
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, ending 2018 with around 5,100
closures
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shop, closures, openings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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