IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
#results #survey #people #coffee #tea #habits #five #australian #cities #summarise #information #features，and #comparisons
The bar chart compares the habits of buying and drinking
coffee
 and tea between five cities in Australia in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
 4 weeks.
It is clear that
Australain
Correct your spelling
Australian
 in these five cities preferred to go to a cafe for
coffee
 and tea in
last
Correct article usage
the last
show examples
 month,
while
 the
percentage
 of people
bought
Correct pronoun usage
who bought
show examples
 fresh
coffee
 in the same period
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 significantly low. Among all of the figures, Melbourne has the highest
percentage
, with 64% of citizens
went
Wrong verb form
going
show examples
 to a cafe for
coffee
 or tea, and Hobart and Sydney ranked as the second and third respectively.
On the other hand
, the lowest
percentage
 of city residents appears in people buying fresh
coffee
 in Brisbane and Adelaide, with lower than 35%. Seeing the trend, the figures for the same category
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 quite equal between the five cities. Especially for the
percentage
 of people buying instant
coffee
, the number just
has
Verb problem
apply
show examples
slightly different, between 45% to 55%.
Submitted by lovesonya0227 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, percentage with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
▼

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!