The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the
number
of
vistors
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visitors
staying on
cruise
ships,
island
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islands
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, and
total
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the total
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of them in a Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017.
It is clear that
during the
seven year
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seven-year
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period, the
number
of
tourists
increased significantly. Seven years later, the visitors staying on
cruise
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the cruise
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went over the visitors on
island
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an island
the island
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in 2017. In 2010, there
are
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were
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about 0.7
millions
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million
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of
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tourists
staying on
island
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the island
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, which is higher than people accommodating on
cruise
ships, with only 0.25
millions
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million
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. A year later, the amount of
island
stayers remained the same,
while
cruise
stayers
grew
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double
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doubled
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to 0.5. In 2012, more people stayed on
island
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the island
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and its
tourists
was
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were
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in a stable
number
(1.5) for
following
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the following
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years, which only dropped a little during 2016.
In contrast
,
cruise
ships gained
its
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popularity and the
number
of visitors increased dramatically for the rest of the years. Combined
the
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two increasing lines, the total
number
of
tourists
was 3.5 times more
at the end
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cruise, island, tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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