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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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Firstly
,
this
 chart
involve
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to tell
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 us that, how the money was spent. The table includes three categories. These are ‘Salaries, Technology and Buildings and transports’.
Moreover
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this
 chart is about
‘Police
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the ‘Police
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 Budget’.
Secondly
, when we look at the panel National
Goverment
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government
175.5
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had 175.5
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m in 2017 and 177.8m in 2018. Later on ‘Local Taxes 91.2m in 2017 and 102.3m in 2018. As you can see National
Goverment
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government
 and Local taxes
are
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 increased in 2018.
Nonetheless
 ‘Other sources 38m in 2017 and 38.5m in 2018. It seems that almost
equel
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equal
. In
conclusion
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 totality
is
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 304.7m in 2017 and 318.6m in 2018. Taking everything into account we see an increase in 2018. All in all, the diagram which is above mentioned describes . From my point of Salaries
down
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 6% in 2018.
Hence
 they
recived
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received
 less salary.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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