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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.
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The line graph compares the
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 of overseas
students
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 from 4 various countries at a university in the UK over the 1995 and 2015 period.
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,
it is clear that
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 each continent experienced differently,
while
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students
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 from Asia increased sharply,the figure from Europe rose with some fluctuation
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when African
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 fell over time. As the graph shows,Asian Point started at 60
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 in 1995 followed by a small rise to around 85 in 2005.
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,it grew
subsequently
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 to just under 120 in 2015.
According to
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 Africa,in 1995 and 2005 there were 20
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,respectively.
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, there was a rise to 30
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 in 2010 before dropping to 20
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 in 2015.Turning to Europe,its figure started at 50 which remained stable until 2005
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 their
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 experienced fluctuation over the next 5 years until 2015.Afterwards,
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 from North America remained unchanged in 1995 and 2000 with 20
students
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,respectively.Meanwhile,in 2005 it rebounded and reached a peak of 70
students
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 in 2015.
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