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Band 5

n some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass, and cans). What are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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The recycling of paper, glass, and cans does not have enough
machines
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 to reproduce again in some nations.
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caused
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 by the less
awareness
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 in
people
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 and the solution is that the
government
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 should step up to introduce more recycling
machines
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 so that
people
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 can
knows
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 more about
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this
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products
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. The reason behind
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 problem to there is less
awareness
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 among the
people
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 and they do not know about the benefits of recycling. Every person knows only about some
products
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 like water, and plastic, but there are more
products
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 we can recycle and which we can use again for a second time. Recent research concluded that we can recycle
products
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 that are made from banana leaves
as
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for as
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 much time as we need. The root cause of
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 incident is a bad relationship between the
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 and the
people
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. They do not know about many new
products
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 that they can perform many recycle
products
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 and their uses.
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, the solution to
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 situation is that the
government
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 should step up and take some action about the invention of more
machines
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 for the city and country. It will help to decrease global warming it will increase our plastic-free nations and
also
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 save the next generation.
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, In Germany for recycling
products
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, they provide some cash to the customer and it will spread
awareness
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 to the
people
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in
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on
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 the land. We can spread more news about
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 through advertising in the news, and ads
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 so that
people
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 can know more about
machines
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. In conclusion, I conclude that some nations should use more recycling
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 for many
products
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 to recycle. there should be more
awareness
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 to the humans and the
government
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 assist them by creating different inventions. Many
machine
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 are there in
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 country so we can use
it
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them
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 wisely and save our nation.

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General
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Structure
Your essay provides a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies relevant causes and solutions for the issue of insufficient recycling.
Supporting Examples
You have included a specific example from Germany, which adds value to your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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