The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows average annual percentages of online adults who use different social networks.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of online
adults
using six different social
flaforms
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platforms
flatforms
( no
site
,
one
site
, two
sites
, three
sites
, four
sites
, five
sites
) between 2014 and 2105.
Overall
, the
percentag
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percentage
of
users
who used
one
site
in both years given was the highest. Noticeably, the figures for
adults
used
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who used
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social networks
in
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apply
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was
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were
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higher than
that
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those
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in 2015.
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Looking
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at the bar chart closer, we can see that about 36%
users
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of users
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who used
one
site
was
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were
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the highest, which was nearly 8% higher than the proportion of
adults
used
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who used
show examples
one
site
in 2015. There was only
1
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a 1
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% higher
in
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apply
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percentage of online
adults
used
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who used
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no
site
in 2014 compared to the figure in 2015.
Conversely
,
1%higher
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a 1%higher
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in
proportion
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the proportion
a proportion
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of
users
who used three
site
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sites
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was seen in 2104 and 2015. in terms of the remains
categise
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categories
, the percentage of internet
users
used
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who used
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three
sites
in 2014 accounted for around 12%, which was 8% lower than that in 2015. There
was
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were
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5% and 8% that seen in the
porportion
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proportion
of online
adults
who used four
sites
in both years 2014, 2015 respectively.
Last
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The last
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category was five
sites
, around 2%
online
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of online
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users
used
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were used
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in 2104 and 4%
adults
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of adults
show examples
used
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were used
show examples
in 2105.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, site, one, sites, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average annual percentage
  • online adults
  • social networks
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • highest/lowest
  • discernible trends
  • consistent growth/decline
  • popularity
  • competition
  • functionality
  • significant changes
  • patterns
  • spike/drop in usage
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