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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The following pictures
illutrate
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illustrate
 a university sports
centre
 at the present time and how it will be in the future. At first glance, it is evident that the
sport
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centre
 is planned to go under several changes.
However
, the 25m pool, seating section and
the
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reception will remain the same after the developments. Another interesting point is
thet
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that
 the gym will be expanded in the future. Looking at the details, both west and east outdoor courts are projected to be a part of
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the sport
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sport
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centre
 building. The western outdoor court will be converted
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 a leisure pool, followed by adding a changing room and sports shop
in
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 the south side of it.
Following
this
, the eastern outdoor court will turn into a
sport
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 hall with other different sections, including two
separated
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 dance studios next to each other
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 the right side, and a changing room and a cafe at the bottom.
Overall
, the
sport
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centre
 will be a more extended place in the future, offering more activities
such
 as dancing.
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task achievement
Consider adding more detailed descriptions and comparisons of changes to the sports center layout to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure accurate spelling and grammatical consistency throughout the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion clearly describe the overall changes to the sports center.
logical structure
The essay is well-organized and follows a logical structure.
supported main points
Main points are suitably supported with specific references to the layout changes.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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