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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates how a waterfront estate transformed after some development in Australia over a 74-year period from 1950 until now.
Overall
, the beachfront space has experienced considerable changes between 1950 and
present
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the present
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. The main development
are
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is
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 the erection and
addtion
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adding
addition
some
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of some
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 amenities. As can be seen from the map, in 1950, near the main road, there were some facilities including
the
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a
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 playground,
dinning
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dining
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 tables,
pavillion
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pavilion
 and
the
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a
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 car park.
In
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On
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 the opposite side, two
25 meter
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25-meter
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pool
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pools
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 were located near a beach. Turning to 74 years later, we can see that a lot of changes in the waterfront place in Australia.
Firstly
, the playground zone in the year 1950 was
replace
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replaced
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to
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by
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 the second car park in the top left-hand corner.
Secondly
, the pool which is in the southern west of
this
 location has extended in size from 25m to 50m. The road
also
expand
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expands
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 to the east side of
this
 area and
acces to
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accesses
 the lighthouse.
In addition
, it can be seen that the addition of some new
amneities
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amenities
such
 as two surf clubs and the large restaurant near the beach at the moment.
However
, a lighthouse, the first car park and
pool
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the pool
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in
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on
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 the
leftside
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left side
left-side
 remain unchanged.
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