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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate information about
Subscription
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the Subscription
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 of mobile
phone
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phones
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 and fixed phone lines in four countries namely, Enitrca,
India
,
UK
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the UK
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 and
Uruguary
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Uruguay
. Over ten periods from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that there are dramatic changes in both lines. Uruguay and
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 tend to highest level,
by contrast
; Eritca has the same level through all periods.
Turing
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Turning
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 to the first point, we can observe that
Eritrca
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Europe
 and
India
accorder
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accorded
 the same levels over first five years,
pproximately
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approximately
 10.
Additionally
,
India
 has started to go up
to
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until
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untill
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it
 arrived
to
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at
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 just above 50 but unfortunately, Eritca accomplished in the same approximate.
Furthermore
,
obviously
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obviously,
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 we can note that there is a sharp increase
of
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in the UK
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Uk
 from under just 50 to
reached
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reach
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at
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apply
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50.
In addition
, the
last
 point in the first line we can see
Uruguary
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Uruguay
 had no change through all
priods
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periods
 which
acqiure
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acquire
 nearly 100.
Lastly
, we can see that all countries still
the
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 same increase in all
pirods
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periods
.
Uruguary
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Uruguay
,
Uk
,
India
 and Eritrea had the different
precentages
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percentages
, 60,30,50 and 20
prespectively
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respectively
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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