The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

The following pie charts show the main modes of transportation people used to to travel to university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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The charts
compares
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the types of
transports
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transport
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that people
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to commute to university
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for work or study in 2004 and 2009.
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car
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the car
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was the most popular option of transport in 2004 and
bus
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the bus
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took over the popularity in 2009. Car was used by more than half of the people in 2004.
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, the number of car users declined to slightly above a quarter in 2009. The second most used transportation was
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starting with 33% in 2004
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and grew to 46%
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of the period.
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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began with just below 10% and people grew
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on
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type of transportation in 2009 with 16% users. Commuting by train and walking to the university received more attention during the period. They started with small numbers in 2004, 3% and 4% respectively and these numbers rose slightly to 4% and 6% by 2009.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of transport
  • commuting patterns
  • sustainable travel
  • urban congestion
  • public transportation
  • private vehicles
  • carpooling
  • urban infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • modal shift
  • cyclists
  • pedestrians
  • traffic volume
  • ride-sharing
  • policy initiatives
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