The diagram below shows the manufacturing porcess for making sugar from sugar crane.

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The diagram illustrates different stages in

process

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the process

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of manufacturing

sugar

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from

sugar

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cane.

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, the process consists of 7 stages from growing to drying and cooling. The process starts with farming, and it takes nearly 12-18 months

the

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for the

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plant

getting

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to reach

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its mature stage.

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this

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stage, the harvest

are

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collected by means of machines or manually and the raw

material

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materials

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are transported for crushing.

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the

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result of

crush

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the crush

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, the juice is obtained which is purified in the Limestone filter.

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, the

jouce

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juice

boiled in

evaporator

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an evaporator

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in order to get syrup. The evaporation boils it up to the point where its water content is completely evaporated. The remained part is sent to Centrifuge in order to disparate crystal from syrup.

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, the product is

submitted

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subjected

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to drying and cooling in order to get

sugar

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Finally

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, the

sugar

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was packed and transported to the

wholesales

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wholesale

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for clients.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

146 words

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing porcess for making sugar from sugar crane.

Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in adddition to good qualification for job success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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