Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?
Every
sports
plays an important role in native Change to a singular noun
sport
citizens
Change noun form
citizens'
citizen's
life
whether Fix the agreement mistake
lives
if its
cricket, football, tennis Correct your spelling
it is
and
many more. People follow Correct word choice
or
sports
players
as their ideals and follow its
Fix the agreement mistake
their lives
life
and value life
a crazy fan
. So, I personally believe that the action of each and every Fix the agreement mistake
fans
players
in Fix the agreement mistake
player
sports
plays a very crucial role even off the sports
ground. This
essay will discuss why I disagree with this
statement that if the player is very briiliant
in Correct your spelling
brilliant
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
his
her
field
but
Correct word choice
apply
its
actions off the Correct pronoun usage
their
his
her
field
plays
Change the verb form
play
vital
role as well.
Sportsmen Add an article
a vital
professionals
behaviour of action off the ground Change noun form
professional's
professionals'
are
important because their followers Change the verb form
is
follows
them as their ideal and watch their podcasts, after match interviews and with growing social media Change the verb form
follow
its
easier to spread it around the world. Correct your spelling
it's
For example
, the
Change preposition
in the
after match
Add a hyphen
after-match
intervirew
of Correct your spelling
interview
interviews
Correct article usage
the natives
natives
favourite Change noun form
natives'
native's
player
, they would watch them and follow their answers very keenly. So, if their favourite Fix the agreement mistake
players
players
behaviour is not friendly none of its audience would love it.
Change to a genitive case
player's
players'
Secondly
, their actions outside the field
is
crucial because many Change the verb form
are
players
have been sponsored by endorsement bodies to promote their branding. So, in this
scenario if something happen
with one of Change the verb form
happens
it
, either Correct pronoun usage
them
brand
or player Correct article usage
the brand
both
gets affected. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For example
, of my favourite cricket players
Ms Dhoni, I follow Fix the agreement mistake
player
himas
my cricket ideal with his calm and strategic mind even in tough situations which indirectly Correct your spelling
him as
helping
me in my real Wrong verb form
helps
life
examples in some parts.
To sum up
, I feel the actions of players
in any sports
field
are vital for its
fan following, as we learn from them and we follow them very blindly.Correct pronoun usage
their
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