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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart illustrates the population's age in
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Iceland and
timeline
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the timeline
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 is between 1990 and 2020.
Overall
, there are five age groups and all of them have
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 trend of decrease, except
of
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for
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 people between
twenty five
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twenty-five
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 and
fifty four
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fifty-four
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 and the oldest group. As shown in the graph,
percentage
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the percentage
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 of humans between 0 and 14
have
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has
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fall
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 down. In the start it
has
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was
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 nearly 26%, but in the end
has
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it was
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 less than 20%.
However
, despite
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 they are in
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second place. Their nearly tail was
next
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the next
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 age group between 15 and 24, with
bit
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a bit
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 more than 20% in 1990 and
worst
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the worst
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 result in
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2020. The leader had been at first with 30% and
recordly
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record
recorded
 almost 50% in the
last
 year. As seen in the illustration, the 2 oldest units
has
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have
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 the same indexes, and almost never raised or decreased. In
the
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1990 younger one was
leader
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a leader
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although
 10 years after
older
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the older
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 one overtook it and never
give
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gave
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 the leadership to
other
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the other
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 one.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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