Air pollution is currently a big issue in most industrialized cities causing respiratory problems and changes in weather patterns. What do you think are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce air pollution?

It is argued that
air
pollution
has
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a global problem and it is considered as a main factor behind respiratory and
weather
problems. I completely support the idea and will enlist the
causes
and solutions in the essay. Nowadays, many industrialized countries are facing the issue of
air
pollution
. As, there are many factors that
causes
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the atmospheric
pollution
. First and foremost one is
insudtrial
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industrial
sities
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sites
cities
. Many developed nations are building more and more industries. The defusion of harmful gases from
the
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industries often
pollute
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the
air
. The second reason is transportation, as heavy vehicles release smoke, which is
curical
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crucial
critical
for the
air
. The third reason is
burning
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of garbage openly. The smoke and dust of burning garbage
makes
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the atmosphere
effected
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.
However
, these factors of
air
pollution
also
affect the health of human beings. It
causes
many diseases like cancer,
problem
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is
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taking breath, coughing, asthma and many other skin diseases as well.
Along with
it
the
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change
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in
weather
conditions like
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the distruction
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distruction
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destruction
of
ozone
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the ozone
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layer and increase in temperature
has
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been observed.
Moreover
, it is said that if nations will not take
a
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proper action on time,
than
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the world will become a miserable place to live. The states should take measures to reduce
air
pollution
to save the world from a disaster.
For instance
, the
leaderships
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leadership
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should make
such
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laws through which the industries will only be allowed to release certain
amout
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amount
amounts
of gases. Even the
authorties
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authorities
should
bane
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ban
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private cars and ask their people to use public transportation, which will reduce the number of cars on the road and less smoke will be released.
Instead
of burning garbage, it should be pressed in
depth
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of
ground
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. Even the
managment
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management
should lessen the use of plastic in their territory.
Furthermore
, the
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authorities
should introduce schemes of
plantation
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the plantation
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, in which
public
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the public
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will be asked to grow trees to make their environment green, which will maintain the temperature and
weather
of the globe.
To conclude
, it is proven from the above essay that
air
pollution
causes
many respiratory and
weather
problems and it is in the
hand
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hands
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of
a nations
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nations
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to adopt
such
messures
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measures
to overcome
the
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air
pollution
and make the world
healthier
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a healthier
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place to live.
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