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the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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Porth Harbour, from the
year
 2000 and today 2024. In
this
 essay, I will compare and report on the main features of
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Porth Harbour.
Firstly
, on the east side of the Harbour, there was a castle in the
year
 2000. Now in the
year
 2024, it has been changed to a hotel called Proth Hotel. In
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, before the hotel right next to the road you can find the addition of cafès and shops,
this
 was not true in the
year
 2000.
Secondly
, the
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 of docks in 2024 is a major difference.
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, on the main road, right after the first car park, you can find showers and
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toilets
.
this
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year
 2000.
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, in the
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 used to be a space for fishing boats next to the first car park.
This
 has been changed to feature private yachts.
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language
Pay close attention to spelling and grammar. Common errors like 'adittion' should be corrected to 'addition' and 'their' should be 'there'.
structural
The essay lacks a concluding sentence that summarizes the main points. Try to end your essay with a strong conclusion to wrap up your comparisons.
coherence
Consider grouping related changes together more clearly to improve the logical structure of your essay. For example, mention all new facilities near the hotel in one paragraph.
language
Work on varying your sentence structures. Currently, the sentences are quite simple. Using a wider range of sentence types will make your essay more engaging.
evidence
The essay provides clear and relevant examples to support the comparisons, which strengthens the task response.
task
You successfully identified and compared the significant changes in the Porth Harbour between 2000 and 2024.

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