The two maps show a park in 1920 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The maps describe the development of Grange seen in the east part of the
park
from 1920 to now.
Capitalize word
Park
Overall
, it is clear that
there are several change
in Change to a plural noun
changes
Correct article usage
the contruction
contruction
of the Correct your spelling
construction
park
. The biggest change hasAdd a missing verb
been
park
and the relocation of infrastructures.
Looking at the map in
1920 more closely, we can see that a fountain was located in the centre,Change preposition
of
a
stage for musicians was situated to the west. There were five seats and three rose gardens Correct word choice
and a
contructed
around the Correct your spelling
constructed
park
. there was a pond for water plants in the northeast and a glasshouse in the southeast. there were two entrance
, one Fix the agreement mistake
entrances
run
along Arnold Replace the word
ran
avenue
to the north and Capitalize word
Avenue
other
Correct article usage
the other
run
along Eldon Replace the word
ran
street
to the south.
Turning to the map today, a rose garden has Capitalize word
Street
been
taken Unnecessary verb
apply
place
of Correct article usage
the place
fountain
, which has been removed. Correct article usage
a fountain
there
four seats have been moved to the centre, covering around the rose garden. Having a removal of Correct your spelling
These
stage
for musicians, Add an article
the stage
a
Change the article
an
Amphithearte
for concerts has been Correct your spelling
Amphitheatre
contructed
. A rose garden and ponds of water plants have been replaced by a cafe and children's play. there is a water feature built, which has taken Correct your spelling
constructed
place
of Correct article usage
the place
glasshouse
. Add an article
the glasshouse
a glasshouse
Finally
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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