The two maps show a park in 1920 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps show a park in 1920 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The maps describe the development of Grange
park
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Park
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from 1920 to now.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are several
change
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changes
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in
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the contruction
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contruction
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construction
of the
park
. The biggest change has
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been
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seen in the east part of the
park
and the relocation of infrastructures. Looking at the map
in
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of
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1920 more closely, we can see that a fountain was located in the centre,
a
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and a
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stage for musicians was situated to the west. There were five seats and three rose gardens
contructed
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constructed
around the
park
. there was a pond for water plants in the northeast and a glasshouse in the southeast. there were two
entrance
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entrances
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, one
run
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along Arnold
avenue
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Avenue
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to the north and
other
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the other
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run
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ran
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along Eldon
street
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Street
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to the south. Turning to the map today, a rose garden has
been
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taken
place
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the place
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of
fountain
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a fountain
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, which has been removed.
there
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These
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four seats have been moved to the centre, covering around the rose garden. Having a removal of
stage
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the stage
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for musicians,
a
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an
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Amphithearte
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Amphitheatre
for concerts has been
contructed
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constructed
. A rose garden and ponds of water plants have been replaced by a cafe and children's play. there is a water feature built, which has taken
place
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the place
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of
glasshouse
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the glasshouse
a glasshouse
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.
Finally
,
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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