The two maps show a park in 1920 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps show a park in 1920 and in present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The maps show the transformation of Grange
Park
in
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from
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1920 to
present
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the present
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day. It is noteworthy that some modern facilities replaced the old and conventional features. The most significant change is the new amphitheatre located on the left side of the
park
, replacing the stage for musicians. Previously facing 360
degree
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degrees
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, the new stage is designed to face one side of
audience
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the audience
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.
Instead
of a water fountain that used to be
on
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in
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the
center
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centre
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of the
park
, a new rose garden is the
centerpiece
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centrepiece
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of the
park
, with four seating areas surrounding it. These aforementioned four benches are
also
newly located, as in 1920, they nested on the far left of the
park
and close to the entrances. Another rose garden previously located on the left side of
Arnold
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the Arnold
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Avenue Entrance has been replaced with a cafe, with
new
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a new
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children's playground laid right beside it. Another new attraction in
the
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apply
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Grange
Park
now is a newly constructed water feature, positioned on the mouth of
newly
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the newly
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opened underground car
park
entrance. It
also
can be accessed through the Eldon Street Entrance.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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