The maps below shows the village of Stakeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information

The maps below shows the village of Stakeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information
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information on the development of Stakeford in 1930 and 2010. A significant extension of the village has been clearly presented. In 1930 Stakeford consisted of one main road along which buildings were located. In the north before the bridge that passes the River Stoke 10 houses were constructed
as well as
two shops and
post
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office on the west side of the road and
primary
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school on the east. Behind the schools and between
river
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and the road there was a farmland area. In the south part of the village
Large
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house with
garden
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was located.
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, by 2010 Stakeford had come a huge expansion to the east, wets, and primarily south. Few additional roads to the new estates were added in the former farmland areas and the number of houses increased to 51. Post office and primary school remained in their original positions;
however
, a development of the school is
also
presented. The large house with the garden was transformed into
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retirement home.
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