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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for the government to make legal requirements. To what extent do you think laws are needed ti make people recycle more of their waste?

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At present, few individuals argue that a sufficient amount of
waste
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 is not recycled and the
government
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 should bring up laws to
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 problem. Personally, I think the
government
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 cannot fully
involve
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 in
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 process as there are
further
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 methods and they will be outlined.
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, if
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government
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the government
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 implemented strict rules towards poor recycling,
people
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will
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 be more concerned
on
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about
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 their regular usage of materials.
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, the United States
have
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 introduced a new tax
for
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on
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 the amount of garbage released.
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,
people
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 re-use
the
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apply
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items
such
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 as bags and plastic bottles, and they collect the rubbish based on its materials (plastic, glass, paper).
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, the housewives collect kitchen
waste
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 and use
as
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it as
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 compost/fertilizers to plant. So the United States is the perfect mimic to other countries and proved how far
government
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 laws
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 change
people
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.
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, a proper education of the consequent results of improper
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 disposal is
also
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 equally important. If an increased number of social programs are introduced explaining possible outcomes like global warming, climate change, imbalance of
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 and other environmental issues are informed,
people
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 will
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understand
 the reality and foster recycling.
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, introducing discounts, cash prizes, and gifts for
people
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 who minimize
waste
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 production.
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, Australia reduced the yearly tax and offered family trips to Sri Lanka.
This
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 method of promotion encourages individuals to follow a proper
waste
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 control scheme. In conclusion, even though
government
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 laws make
make
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people
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 recycle and
re-use
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reuse
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the
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items,
however
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, offering information to
people
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of
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about
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 the consequences of improper garbage disposal and rewards will definitely help to overcome
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 situation.
Submitted by Witharana Senesh Rasinda Wickramasinghe on

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