The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart compares the information of
coffee
and tea consumption habits of residents in a
4 weeks
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4-week
period in five Australian
cities
.
Overall
, the contribution of
people
that
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who
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chose to go to a cafe for
coffee
or tea stood at the highest among the other
catagories
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categories
in the majority of the
cities
.
Whereas
, freshly bought
coffee
by the
people
has the lowest percentage in all
cities
. Regarding the interest of the persons who consumed fresh
coffee
, in
Sydney
, the
figure
held at around 43%,
whereas
in Melbourne
being
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it was
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just slightly below
Sydney
's. Followed by Hobart with
the
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a
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total number of approximately 37%. As for Brisbane and Adelaide, both
cities
stood at nearly the same percentage at about 38%. The number of
people
who went to a cafe in Melbourne is nearly two-thirds of the rate.
while
, in
Sydney
and Hobart around 61% and 62%, respectively. In
Brisbane
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Brisbane,
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the
figure
stayed at just over 55%, and approximately 49% in the city of Adelaide. The percentage of
people
who bought soluble
coffee
rank
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ranks
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the highest in Hobart at approximately 54%.
While
the
figure
in Brisbane stood at around 42%, its
figure
reached exactly half of the
porpotion
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portion
proportion
in Adelaide. As for Melbourne the rate
just
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is just
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under half, followed
with
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by
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Sydney
at nearly 47%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, people, sydney, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • purchase locations
  • frequency
  • influencing factors
  • artisanal
  • preferences
  • survey data
  • market trends
  • specialty stores
  • drinking habits
  • urban consumption
  • morning rush
  • afternoon break
  • brand loyalty
  • quality-conscious
  • convenience-driven
  • organic products
  • habitual drinkers
  • occasional consumers
  • taste preferences
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