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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The graph
sows
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shows
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 the
consuption
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consumption
 of fish and some different kinds of meat. In a European country between 1979 and
2004
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2004,
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 people change their
consuption
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consumption
. The most popular food was
beef
 in 1979. It was 210 grams per person per week. But after 1987 1989
this
 food's grams per person decreased
for
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 200.
Chicken
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 was
second
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popular
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most popular
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 consumption after
beef
. When
beef
 was
drop
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, chicken became first for 1988-2004 years. Third the consumption of food was lamb. IT
was go
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 down
150
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 to 60 grams per
perso
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person
 per week.And
in
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from
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 1989 to 2004 it was still third. People chose fish less than others and
25
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 years it was no change. As can be seen from the graph the amount of increased consumption was chicken,
beef
 downfall more than others.
The
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 period between 1979 and 2004 fish was less
choosed
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chosen
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 meal and in 2004 it
not
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be
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apply
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changed yet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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