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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the sum of money
USA
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the USA
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,
EU
 and other countries give to third-world countries between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the investment in
USA
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the USA
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 developing na witnessed an upward trend during the whole 5 years. With the most money donated, the
USA
 had a larger section
instead
 of
EU
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the EU
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 and other nations. In 2006, 9,8
million
 dollars given by the
USA
 was ranked first out of
EU
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the EU
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 and other states and slightly increased to 11
million
 dollars in 2007. The most moderate growth was recorded in 2008, of 6
million
 dollars, from 11
million
 to 17
million
.
By contrast
, in the subsequent years, the donation slowly fell to 16,7 but
then
 hit
the
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a
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 peak of 20,3
million
 in 2010.
However
, the funds of other countries and
EU
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the EU
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 started at 2,8 and 3,1
million
, which
just
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is just
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 one-third of the starting of
USA
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the USA
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. After 4 years period,
while
 the number of money
USA
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the USA
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 gave in 2010 was double
for
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apply
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the figure in 2006, both
EU
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the EU
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 and other nations just climbed by around 1,1 to 1,2
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, eu, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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