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Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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fuel for vehicles is
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environmental pollution. I fully disagree with
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foremost reason in
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 cost of gas will not reduce the usage of vehicles.
In other words
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 the car owners.
For instance
, costly gas allows the owner to spend more at the pump, leaving less to spend on other goods and services.
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individuals.
Furthermore
, it will increase the cost of using public transportation. Public transportation
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 would increase their fares as they are the most important input of transportation.
Poeple
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People
 still need to travel whether by their private automobiles or by public
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. 
As a result
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, inflation can be caused. In the gist of the above contents, it can be concluded that increasing the price of fuel is not the only
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 we need
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 protect our environment. There are other practices and rules that we can follow to save the environment from damage.
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
For 'Coherence and Cohesion,' work on creating smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs to make your argument flow more naturally. Using linking words and phrases effectively will help improve this aspect.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.
task achievement
You have presented understandable and relevant ideas in response to the task prompt.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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