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The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.

The line graph shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years.
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The line graph illustrates people's
level
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 of satisfaction regarding the system of hospitals in four different nations for 3 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Canadian citizens had fluctuated about the
level
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 of pleasure of health
care
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 data,
while
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 in the other three countries, there was a gradual satisfaction.
According to
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 Canada area, individuals ware a great
level
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 of pleasure about the role of medical
care
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 at 55% percentage in 1991 ,
however
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, it plummeted to 15% in 1998. After 1998, The Canadians had experienced. dramatically from 15% to 39 dr In 2007.
On the other hand
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, the US and the UK had some rates regarding the
level
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 of satisfaction with the health
care
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 system that increased steadily over the given period starting at 10% in the US and finishing at approximately 12%.
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 the UK was 22% in 1991 to finish with 24%.
To sum up
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, in the Netherlands, there was a positive attitude towards hospital
Care
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 in 1991
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nearly 50% By followed 7 years, there was a gradual change in people's opinions. After that, it witnessed a fall to 45% over the following 7 years.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words level, care with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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