The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries

▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the three main problems
people
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in different age groups may face when living abroad. It is interesting to highlight that every
group
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have different ultimate challenges during their stay in other countries. Young
people
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in their 18 to 34 years old tend to have problems making friends, accounting for 46%.
Next,
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deciding a house to live in comes
second,
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at only 6% less than befriending
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. The
last
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challenge
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young adult needs to worry about is learning the local language, at no more than a third. Meanwhile, the second
group
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consists of respondents aged 35-54 years old
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that the three main challenges they may face are almost at the same level.
Although
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only differs subtly, finding somewhere to live poses a problem for them, at 3% higher than the need to make friends, accounting for 39%. The
challenge
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to speak in the local tongue
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become a
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for 35% of the
people
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in
this
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group
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.
In contrast
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with the two previous groups, learning a foreign language is the main integration
challenge
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for
people
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in the older
group
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(over 55 years old), comprising more than half of the
group
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.
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, older
people
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think that establishing a house and socializing is not going to cause big problems, with only 22% and 23% of respondents agreeing, respectively.
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