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Work on grammar and sentence structure. Many sentences contain errors that affect clarity.
task
Use specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and improve your task response score.
coherence
Improve paragraph structure. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, and these ideas should be clearly linked to the essay question.
task
You attempted to present both sides of the argument, which is good for task achievement.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present, which helps with the overall structure of the essay.
task
The topic is clearly understood and you made an effort to explain your opinion, which is a positive aspect of task response.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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