The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart above depicts information about the divorce data in two different countries, especially in Europe between
years
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the years
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2011 and 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that at
first,
the divorce
rates
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rate
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in Finland was lower but
then
gradually
increase
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increased
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.
On the other hand
, Sweden had
similiar
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similar
patterns
with
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to
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Finland,
initially
the statistics
was
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were
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higher,
after
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but after
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that the
number
was continuously fall
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was continuously falling
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.
Firstly
, in 2011, the divorce
rates
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rate
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in Finland was as
many
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much
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as 38 per
cent
. Afterwards, the
number
was decreased to 32 per
cent
. Following that, from 2013 to 2015, the
number
was steadily jumped. Respectively, 39 per
cent
, 41 per
cent
, and 42 per
cent
. On the other
sides
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side
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, in 2011, Sweden began at 43 per
cent
. As soon as
,
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the percentage was
hitted
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hit
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the peak at 49 per
cent
.
Besides
, in 2013, the
number
was constantly slump to 48 per
cent
.
Besides
that, the
number
was consistently down
until
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to
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47 per
cent
.
Subsequently
,
hitted
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hit
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the bottom at 38 per
cent
.
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