Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of many species & loss of biodioversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solution can be done to to solve it?

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It cannot be denied that people have taken part in the loss of
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and extinction of many species around the
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human birth rate has made an impact on the
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endangering the
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that has been there for a long time. In short, with the rising
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may cause dangers to the environment. Mining
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to mine minerals
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as gold and iron that can be useful for
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for every species. In brief, the advancement of technologies
also
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in the extinction of the
world
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help from
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all around the
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should make some regulations that could help in maintaining the
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needed in order to prevent the loss of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Biodiversity:** The variety of plant and animal life in the world or in a particular habitat, often seen as an indicator of the health of an ecosystem.
  • 2. **Deforestation:** The action of clearing a wide area of trees, negatively impacting natural habitats.
  • 3. **Ecosystem:** A biological community of interacting organisms and their physical environment.
  • 4. **Pollution:** The presence in or introduction into the environment of a substance which has harmful or poisonous effects.
  • 5. **Climate Change:** A change in global or regional climate patterns, often referring to the rise in global temperatures from the mid-20th century onwards.
  • 6. **Overexploitation:** The excessive use of species that have economic value.
  • 7. **Invasive Species:** Non-native species that spread from the point of introduction to become naturalized and negatively impact native species and ecosystems.
  • 8. **Habitat Destruction:** The process in which natural habitat is rendered unable to support the species present.
  • 9. **Extinction:** The state or process of a species, family, or larger group being or becoming extinct.
  • 10. **Conservation:** The action of conserving something, in this case, biodiversity and ecosystems.
  • 11. **Sustainable Practices:** Methods of using resources in ways that do not deplete them or cause harm to the environment.
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