Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of many species & loss of biodioversity. What are the primary causes of loss of biodiversity? What solution can be done to to solve it?

It cannot be denied that people have taken part in the loss of
biodiversity
and extinction of many species around the
world
. To solve
this
problem
, it is important to know the cause of why
such
events occur.
This
essay will try to describe the cause and solve
this
problem
. The rising
of
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human birth rate has made an impact on the
world
's
ecosystem
. With many new families, there are
also
many needs
of
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new
home
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homes
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.
This
has made contractors
opened
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lots of forests to make and
sells
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new houses,
thus
endangering the
ecosystem
that has been there for a long time. In short, with the rising
of
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birth rate, many forests will be cut down in order for people to have
home
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a home
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. The advancement of technologies has
also
became
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one of
reasons
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the reasons
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in
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the
declining
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of
world's
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the world's
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ecosystem
by
human
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humans
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. The technology that people
using
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may cause dangers to the environment. Mining
machine
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machines
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,
for example
,
used
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are used
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by
human
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humans
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to mine minerals
such
as gold and iron that can be useful for
human
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humans
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.
However
, the developer usually
forgetting
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the former mining site and just
leave
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it alone,
thus
make
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it barren land that
dangerous
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for every species. In brief, the advancement of technologies
also
playing
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part
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in the extinction of the
world
. To solve
this
problem
,
the
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help from
governments
all around the
world
were
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needed.
Governments
should make some regulations that could help in maintaining the
world
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ecosystem
and
biodiversity
.
For instance
, making rules about mining so that the site can
be relocate
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as soon as the mining finished may
be help
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improving
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the
world
's environment or
make
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some regulations about opening lands and building houses may help
preventing
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illegal logging. In conclusion,
governments
' help
are
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needed to improve
world's
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ecosystem
and
biodiversity
.
To conclude
, the rising
of
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human birth rate and the advancement of technologies have become causes of the
declining
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of
world's
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the world's
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ecosystem
and
biodiversity
. To solve
this
problem
,
governments
' help
are
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is
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needed in order to prevent the loss of
biodiversity
and the extinction of species.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Biodiversity:** The variety of plant and animal life in the world or in a particular habitat, often seen as an indicator of the health of an ecosystem.
  • 2. **Deforestation:** The action of clearing a wide area of trees, negatively impacting natural habitats.
  • 3. **Ecosystem:** A biological community of interacting organisms and their physical environment.
  • 4. **Pollution:** The presence in or introduction into the environment of a substance which has harmful or poisonous effects.
  • 5. **Climate Change:** A change in global or regional climate patterns, often referring to the rise in global temperatures from the mid-20th century onwards.
  • 6. **Overexploitation:** The excessive use of species that have economic value.
  • 7. **Invasive Species:** Non-native species that spread from the point of introduction to become naturalized and negatively impact native species and ecosystems.
  • 8. **Habitat Destruction:** The process in which natural habitat is rendered unable to support the species present.
  • 9. **Extinction:** The state or process of a species, family, or larger group being or becoming extinct.
  • 10. **Conservation:** The action of conserving something, in this case, biodiversity and ecosystems.
  • 11. **Sustainable Practices:** Methods of using resources in ways that do not deplete them or cause harm to the environment.
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