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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population In four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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The graph shows the trend
about
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 the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, adding predictions in 2030 and 2040. The percentage of Indonesia was in
last
 place with around 14% in 1970. The second place was Thailand with about 18%.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 and Malaysia were almost the same
number
 with around 30%. These were in joint first in 1970. By the end of 2020, the rate of population in
cites
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cities
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have
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had
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 grown up, Malaysia had a sharp rising,
it
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and it
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grows
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has grown
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 up to over 80%, placing
in
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it in
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 the
number
 one position in 2020.
In addition
, the rate of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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have
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 slightly increased to
the
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apply
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twice that in 1970, placing
in
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it
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 third in 2020. In second place in 2020 is Indonesia,
the
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where the
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 rate
have
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has
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 increased sharply
with
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to
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 over 60%. It is
forth
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fourth
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 of that in 1970. The
number
 of Thailand
have
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has
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 gradually increased to about 45%, placing
in
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it in
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 the bottom spot. The prediction in 2040
also
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is also
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 shown, the rating in 2040 is
same
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the same
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 as
2020
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in 2020
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. The
number
 of living in
city
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the city
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 will be growing up.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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