The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population In four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population In four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The graph shows the trend
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the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, adding predictions in 2030 and 2040. The percentage of Indonesia was in
last
place with around 14% in 1970. The second place was Thailand with about 18%.
Philippines
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and Malaysia were almost the same
number
with around 30%. These were in joint first in 1970. By the end of 2020, the rate of population in
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cities
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grown up, Malaysia had a sharp rising,
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and it
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grows
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up to over 80%, placing
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the
number
one position in 2020.
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, the rate of
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the Philippines
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have
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slightly increased to
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twice that in 1970, placing
in
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it
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third in 2020. In second place in 2020 is Indonesia,
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rate
have
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increased sharply
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over 60%. It is
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fourth
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of that in 1970. The
number
of Thailand
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gradually increased to about 45%, placing
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the bottom spot. The prediction in 2040
also
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shown, the rating in 2040 is
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as
2020
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in 2020
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. The
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the city
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will be growing up.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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