The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The presented graph demonstrates how
aluminium
cans
are produced from waste.
Overall
, it is important that manufacturing
aluminium
cans
from recycling has 7 steps which start with garbage and end with companies using these kinds of
cans
for their products.
According to
the circulation, at the start, people throw out the
cans
of their drink into the trash;
then
the garbage is sent by truck to the place that has a range of waste materials;
thereafter
,
aluminium
cans
are selected and transferred to the factory which does the recycling process. The diagram illustrates that in the third
stage
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stage,
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water canes have to become clean and small spaces;
as a result
, in the factory the devices washing them by some detergent and
waterafter
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water after
that, sorted by size for shredding better. Later compare them to one thing. In the fourth
section
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we have tools that generate
aluminium
surface from compressed things by heating to have liquid and melting to produce solid. The fact is important that
cans
are cylinders, so we should roll the surface 2.5 to 6 mm to have
cans
;
hence
, we have
cans
that are from recycling;
additionally
, the crucial fact is that 74% of
cans
that the UK inhabitants use are from recycling.
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