Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both this views and give your own opinion.
In recent decades, there are so many environmental
problems
that we need to tackle Use synonyms
such
as the rise of plastic bottles, water shortage, Linking Words
climate
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change
and the Use synonyms
loss
of particular Use synonyms
species
. Some people debate whether the Use synonyms
loss
of particular Use synonyms
species
of Use synonyms
plants
and Use synonyms
animals
is the most important environmental challenge or if there are some other crucial environmental Use synonyms
problems
. In my opinion, the most important problem in the field of environment is Use synonyms
climate
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change
for several reasons which will be discussed in Use synonyms
this
essay.
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Although
living organisms like Linking Words
plants
and Use synonyms
animals
play an important role in Use synonyms
the
nature and we need to take care of them, Correct article usage
apply
climate
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change
has influenced every part of the world, causing severe Use synonyms
problems
like global warming. One of the main Use synonyms
result
of the earth getting warmer is the decrease Change to a plural noun
results
of
rainfall in some countries and snowfall in others. Less Change preposition
in
rainfalls
in an area with Fix the agreement mistake
rainfall
dryer
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a dryer
climate
can lead to drought, where a couple of specific Use synonyms
plants
may no longer be able to grow. Some of these Use synonyms
plants
are food to particular Use synonyms
species
in that zone. When these Use synonyms
plants
are not available, Use synonyms
animals
that feed on them may Use synonyms
also
die from starvation. Linking Words
Consequently
, particular Linking Words
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plants
or Fix the agreement mistake
plant
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animals
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animal
species
may be eliminated as Use synonyms
result
of Add an article
a result
climate
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change
.
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Moreover
, the decrease Linking Words
of
snowfall value caused by Change preposition
in
climate
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change
in areas like Use synonyms
Arctic
zone can Correct article usage
the Arctic
also
have dire consequences. Snowfall keeps the temperature higher in these areas which are the home to some wild Linking Words
animals
that need cold weather to survive, Use synonyms
such
as polar bears and penguins. If the temperature starts to rise, these Linking Words
species
may die. Use synonyms
Thus
, Linking Words
the
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apply
climate
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change
is the main reason Use synonyms
to
the Change preposition
for
loss
of specific Use synonyms
plants
and Use synonyms
animals
in Use synonyms
the
cold habitats as well.
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apply
Furthermore
, global warming caused by Linking Words
climate
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change
has already made a number of ice mountains and glaciers Use synonyms
melted
, increasing the sea water level. Islands are immersing in some parts of the oceans now.
In conclusion, It is crucial to stop Wrong verb form
melt
climate
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change
, as it is the most fundamental challenge Use synonyms
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that existed
existed
now. It can cause Wrong verb form
exists
species
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loss
and numerous other Use synonyms
problems
. it is changing our world in a negative way. If we address the Use synonyms
climate
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change
problem, we can Use synonyms
also
solve so many other Linking Words
problems
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such
as the Linking Words
loss
of some Use synonyms
plants
and Use synonyms
animals
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task achievement
The essay addresses the task adequately, but ensure all arguments are explored in equal depth. The discussion on other environmental problems is a bit brief. Consider giving more balanced coverage to both views. This will help demonstrate a complete response to the task.
coherence cohesion
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example