The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminum cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The flow chart illustrates the process of aluminium
cans
cycling which is made by humans in
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around
world
.
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the world
Overall
, it is clear that
there are seven distinct stages illustrated in the process, commencing with used cans
in the environment and ending with the development of reusing of
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apply
it
.
The first stage is when used Correct pronoun usage
apply
cans
are collected from the garbage by a big track. The next step after
this
is starting of cleaning all of these cans
, and then
sorting them in favourable place
for a week, Fix the agreement mistake
places
and
before compressing Correct word choice
apply
it
they shred all of these Correct pronoun usage
them
cans
first. Over time, are heated and melted manually.
In the subsequent stage, rolling by 2.5mm to 6mm thick is started, the final stage of this
cycle is when recycling is begun, and then
, the reusing of 74% recycled in the United States is finished. Having completed all these steps, the cycling process will then
begin againSubmitted by rraghad.b on
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