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The line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean iakand betveen 2010 and 2017.

The line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean iakand betveen 2010 and 2017.
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The given graph compares the amount of overseas in
million
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 to the island namely the Caribbean in a seven-year interval from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of visitors who stayed on cruise ships fluctuated over the period
while
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 stayers on the island continued to climb.
By contrast
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,there were no stayers on cruise ships in 2010
while
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 it increased slowly to 0.5
million
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 in 2011.
However
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,the point rose slightly to 1
million
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 and 1.3
million
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 in 2014 and 2015,respectively.In 2017 there was a large amount of tourists on cruises at around 2
million
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.Turning to the figure for stayers on the island it began at approximately 0.8
million
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 in 2010 which stayed unchanged in 2011.
Furthermore
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,there was a considerable growth from 1.3
million
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 in 2012 to 1.5 in 2015.In 2016, the number sharply decreased to 1.2
million
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, before rising to 1.5
million
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 in 2017.
According to
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 the total number of overseas visitors, it started at 1
million
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 and increased by 0.5
million
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 every year, reaching 2.5
million
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 in 2014. It
then
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 peaked at 3.5
million
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 overseas visitors in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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