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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#uk #time #year #information #features #comparisons
the
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 shown table is
descriping
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describing
 the
non-workers
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non-worker's
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time
spend
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spent
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 for the
last
 year with percentages of activities between
men
 and
women
 in
morning
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the morning
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 and
afternoon
.
firstly
, the morning
men
demonstrates
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varaity
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variety
 of spend
time
 across the activities, where job hunting scores highest among
activites
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activities
 by 22%
while
 the lowest is drinking with 2%
time
spend
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spent
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.
on the other hand
, morning
women
spends
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spend
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 49% of
the
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their
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time
in
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on
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 housework which is the highest among the
activies
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activities
while
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displayed
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is displayed
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 as playing
sport
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sports
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 and drinking with 1%
time
spend
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spent
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.
secondly
, the
afternoon
men
 and
women
comparision
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comparison
is
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are
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 clearly
illestrates
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illustrates
illustrated
 that
women
 are spending
time
 on housework
by
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at
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 21%
comparing
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compared
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 to
men
 with
time
 spend of 7%. it is worth mentioning that
afternoon
women
 are neither staying in bed nor playing
sport
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sports
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comparing
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compared
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 to
afternoon
men
where
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who
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they
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apply
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do these activities
in
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with
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 minimal
efforts
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effort
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with
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at
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 1% and 4%
respectivily
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respectively
. in
conclution
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conclusion
,
the
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apply
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morning
women
are
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apply
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heavly utalize thier
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heavily utilise their
time
housework
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for housework
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 with
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of 49%
while
 morning
men
are investing
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invest
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thier
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their
time
on
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in
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 job hunting
with
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at
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 22%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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