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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates the
number
 of requests for information by three different methods( in
person
, by letter/email and by telephone) at a tourist office in the
Uk
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UK
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bewteen Jannuary
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between January
 and Fun.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 requests by telephone and in
person
 are upward trend,
while
 request by letter/ email is downward trend. Noticeably,
number
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a number
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 of
people
are requested for
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requesting
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 information in
person
 reaches
of
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apply
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the highest
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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 given. In terms of
request
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requests
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 in
person
, in January, about 400 applicants
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were
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are request
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are requested
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 which is the lowest , and
then
 the
number
 of applicants
increases
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increased
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 dramatically and
peacks
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peaked
 at
neearly
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nearly
 2000
people
, which is the highest.
Similarly
, the
number
 of cases
are
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apply
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requested by telephone is the highest in January, which is around 900 cases,
then
 fluctuates before climbing to approximately 1600 applicants in Jun .
On the other hand
, the
number
 of
people
are
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apply
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requested by letter/email takes second place in January. the trend decreases significantly before hitting the low of
nearlyn
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nearly
 400
people
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, person, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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