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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#requests #formations #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june #information #features #comparison
The line chart illustrates
that
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the
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request
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requests
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of
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apply
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in formations at a visitor office in the UK in the first six
month
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months
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 of the year. In the
Uk
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UK
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 folks mostly use three ways to know about the information in a tourist office. The chart shows to get information
by
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physicaly
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physically
 inside the office and by phone calls
increased
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apply
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.
Majority
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The majority
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 of folks loved to get the details
by
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apply
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in person and with phone calls but
in
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at
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 the
starting
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start
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 of the years all the ways were
populars
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popular
.
However
, people tend towards
in person
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in-person
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 with a
rapidly
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rapid
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 growth and reached
most
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the most
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 popular way to get information in June with more than 1800 individuals.
On the other hand
, humans
also
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prefer
prefered
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prefer
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to
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by
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to
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make
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making
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 a simple call
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in
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on
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in
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 reception ,
this
 trend
also
 increased from 400 to 1600 in just six months but the
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in-person
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in person
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in-person
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 way
is
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has been
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 more popular
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since
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from
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since
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 April. In January near about 700 people used letters and email to know about
palces
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places
 to visit ,
unfortunatelly
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unfortunately
this
 trend declined below 600 in April and
droped
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dropped
 to 380 in June. Folks do not
found
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find
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 that way easy.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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