Task 1 The chart below gives information on the average cost in us dollar of a three year degree course in four different countries in the worl

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The bar chart illustrates information about the median price of

three

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year

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three-year

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degree course

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apply

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among four different developed nations in 2015.

Overall

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all

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in all

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countries the total cost of

three

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year

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three-year

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degree is higher than course

fees

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and living expenses. The country with the highest

overall

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costs was Australia

with in

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within

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slightly below 100,000 USD and it was over 50

percent

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per cent

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more than in the UK.

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, university

fees

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and living costs

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are

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also

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more higher in Australia compared to other countries. The student

fees

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for

three

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year

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three-year

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degree

was

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were

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in both countries almost similar around 58,000$.

However

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Germany

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Germany's

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school

fees

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, living expenses and

overall

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cost of tuition

was

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were

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the lowest

compare

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compared

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to other nations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words fees with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

116 words

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