The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the details of vehicles produced in Argentina,
Australia
and
Thailand
in six years starting from 2003. In both
Australia
and
Thailand
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Thailand,
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the numbers increased rapidly but
Australia
reached the top with very little difference from
Thailand
,
however
demanding for cars only decreased in Argentina. All three countries' numbers started near 300 in 2003
after
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and after
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that it is increased gradually. Argentina was the only one who declined in
number
and reached
on
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200 from 400.
Furthermore
,the other two countries'
number
of vehicles used increased
Thailand
reached 600 highest
number
in 2005 and
Australia
was second with only 400.
Surprising
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rapid increase in cars in
Australia
broke all the records and hit the highest of 1119
at the end
of 2009.Consumption
also
increased in
Thailand
but gradually they all reached the top of the table with the second
number
in 2009. Australian and
Thailand
'sconsumption of cars hit a peak in these years
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, thailand, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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