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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the details of vehicles produced in Argentina,
Australia
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 and
Thailand
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 in six years starting from 2003. In both
Australia
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 and
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Thailand
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Thailand,
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 the numbers increased rapidly but
Australia
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 reached the top with very little difference from
Thailand
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,
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 demanding for cars only decreased in Argentina. All three countries' numbers started near 300 in 2003
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 that it is increased gradually. Argentina was the only one who declined in
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 and reached
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200 from 400.
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,the other two countries'
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 of vehicles used increased
Thailand
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 reached 600 highest
number
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 in 2005 and
Australia
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 was second with only 400.
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 rapid increase in cars in
Australia
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 broke all the records and hit the highest of 1119
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 of 2009.Consumption
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 increased in
Thailand
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 but gradually they all reached the top of the table with the second
number
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 in 2009. Australian and
Thailand
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'sconsumption of cars hit a peak in these years
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, thailand, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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